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Rebeca’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllister
We have read your book called Leon and the place between
and we really enjoyed it. Actually our teacher Mr.Shurlock dressed in Abdul Kazam he was very funny we all laughed sooo much that we couldn’t consentrait on our work!!(: So you can see that we really enjoyed you book!!Actually I would love to read more of your books!!
But what I like the most about the book is when Abdul Kazam appears
in the story and talks with his wired voice☺️👍!!!
But if you want to improve your story I think you should add more adverbs in your writing so you could write what he/she was doing but even how he/she was doing it. I don’t want you to get mad at me but I am just trying to help you make your story even better.👌?Even if I am younger than you!!
I would recommend this book 📚 to 👨🏫 teachers especially yrs 1,2,3 so they can read it to their children in class!!
Jacob’s review of: Leon and the place between
We have liked your book, Leon And The Place Between, and here are some improvements for your book.
Improvements: There should be more characters speaking, there is not much characters speaking, which is Abdul Kazam, Leon, Little Mo, Tom, The Mysterious Boy. The next improvement is BIGGER text, because from like a 1 foot people can’t read the text from your book, Leon And The Place Between. The third improvement is more information about your characters, so about the characters, so like: Leon, the magic believing boy. Ok, lets go to the likes now.
Likes: Sprinkles! The sprinkles when Abdul Kazam comes in the room is some good-drawn sprinkles! 🙂 Funny names like Abdul Kazam, not really much to say on the names, I just don’t know what to write here, let’s go to the Magic. Magic! Lots of people don’t believe in magic, that includes me, magic may be real, but there may be more people not believing in magic more than people that believe in magic.
I would recommend this book to my friend, Aran because I think he may believe in magic.
Ashwin’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllister
I really like the way you used your grammar in the story Leon and the place between and the astonishing adverbs and the amazing adjectives and last but not least the delightful dialogue. I think that the book was amazing and should have won the blue peter’s book award achieved the best book in the 2000s.
I think you could make Leon and the place between 2 -sequel-.
Mhamad’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllisler
We all loved your book you really used your imagination I loved the part
Where he fell down the place between and landed on a carpet and met a boy with blue pantaloons.oh and I liked the part where he said”trust nothing believe in everything.”
To make it better you could describe the boy more because when my teacher said a boy with pantaloons I thought just a normal boy with blue pantaloons not a magical boy.
lots of people that like the book Will get the book for free.
Imaan’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllifler
Me and my class have read your book called Leon and the place between and I want to tell you about what I liked and what you could improve. I like the picture and the colours because it would inpier artis.I also like the part when he steps into the box and fell down down and down into the place between and met a boy. I loved the part when Abdul Kazam did magic because I like magic and other people do as well.
Also I liked the book but it could be improved by adding more discussion to the carters because I didn’t now lots about them .To make it even better you could add more things about Leon’s family because i want to now more . I think you could add some more information because there was not enough information.
Hay was Abdul Kazam face on one of the cloud?
Nicolas’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllister
I alive the shiny colours in your book.
I also like Leon and Abdul lcazam as the main characters
I would have liked to have more about Abdul kasam
I would show my brother the book to read
Miroslav’s review of: Lion and the plane
Author: Angela McAllister
I like the colour beacause it is purple and I love perple.
I also like Abdul kazam because he is a Urey talented person.
I would liked to have read more detail about Abdul kazam.
Noora K’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllister
I am writing to you today because at Essa primary year5 we have been looking at your fantastic book Leon and the place between. We loved it!
I love the art and sound effects they are amazing. I loved the words, the plot and the little rhyme at the end. A nother good thing is the character are so unrealistic and out of this world. My favourite thing is how funny Abdul Kazam’s voice.
As I said the book is fantastic but I would really love some more magic because I do like some magic every now and then. I would love it if Leon could explore and stay in the place between for a little bit more time than he already did. PLEASE may you add some more of Abdul Kazam please please!
I would recommend this book to my younger brother because he is so creative and loves magic and funny things.
From Noora K
From Seemab’s review of: Leon and the place between
Author: Angela McAllisler
I like about that you used your imagination because some because adults are really, good at using there imagination but some are just fine books ,but your books are great,you could improve add more characters because there only 4 people in this book.
You used lots of animals and lots ,verbs and lots of adjectives and some nouns but still your book is great. You have lots of colour and pictures which is very helpful for nowing what going in the book .
I think this book is good for children who are 4-10 because if they are 11 then they will need more information and writing because they need information for there big write .
Alla kazoo alla Kazee here is a story of Abdul Kazam! Let me take you back seven months to the magical circuits!
Wactch out for Abdul Kazams green,emerald magical ring.
Abdul Kazam is a tall,thin man with a long neck,although he did have very curly eyebrows,Abdul Kazam was standing on a black stage that was torn
His face was completely hidden by his dark blue,galaxy cape.His beard was wild and sculptured but his eyes were as big as a turtles shell.His body looked dusty and powerful.
Alla kazoo alla kazam her is the story of Abdul kazam let me take you back two days ago to the magical circus to a great act but watch out for a box where you get disappeared.
Abdul Kazam is a great magician he is a tall thin man with a long neck although he had a large black beard and black curly eyebrows .He had a dark purple cape which had a golden shiner stars over it .Abdul Kazam even had a green gloomy ring that matched his green elf shoes and a golden necklace . He wears a red and black fez on his bold head .Abdul Kazam had a big sucker eyes thatlooked really creepy even his big pointy noise.
Ready to head south to Antarctica.
Year 5 are planning a trip to Antarctica to rescue Shackleton and his crew.
We need to know as much as possible to ensure we have a safe and successful trip.
Can you help us?
——————————————Mrs Summersgill was very generous in replying to all our questions. She also sent us some amazing photos of her and Mr Summersgill in Antarctica.
Here are some photos of use planning our trip to Antarctica.
These ideas are based on descriptions we found in other books. We have ‘borrowed’ ideas from these authors to help improve our own description of Abdul Kazam.
One day there was a busker that was called Jack and he had a dog called Harry.They were leaving in a really small house,that didn’t even look like a house and they were leaving with lots of Skyscapers.Jack was an busker so he was playing an instrument and the instrument was a guitar.One day Jack and Harry were a bit upset and they were upset because they wanted to go in the Countryside.Jack was working really hard because he wanted to go in the countryside so if he was playing the guitar he could get money and he could go in the Countryside and get lots of things.The next day Jack though that going in the Countryside is not the best thing he can go,the best thing he can do is that he can’t go in he Countryside alone.He wanted to go with his best friend Harry.
Abdul Kazam is a mysterious magician and he is very scary too. His face is very long and he has beard. He wears a big blue and purple clock. He has a long eyebrow and long eyelashes . He olso has long pointy fingers.
Abdul Kazam clothes ar as purple as emeralds and his eyes as rubys.His beard as black as a pitch and his eyebrows as corly as a pigs tail.His necklace as twinkle as the stars in space and his boots as a elf shoes .
Awkwardly Abdul Kazam waved his wand was about to hit Leon .Abdul Kazam pour water into his hat and come out like thin air. Abdul Kazam said “who will step in the box “Leon new it had to be him Leon step bravely on the stage.
Abdul Kzam is a powerfu,mysterious magician. His chin is as pointed as a knife. He has some curly,thin eyebrows that are as curly as an optical illusion. He has the hands of a witch. His eyes are as dark as the night and his cloak is the galaxy. His nose is a sharpened pencil.
Abdul Kzam walks clumsily and he talks enthusiastically. He moves his hands elegantly. His words are are hypnotists. He deliberately talks creepily. Comfidantly,he moves round on stage.
On Wednesday 27 of September we went to the marvellous clitheroe castle .First we went in the castle and the gentleman gave us a paper with a clip we had to find pixels around the museum if you find a pixel you have to write tally on your paper.If you find all of them you get an amazing prize. After that we went to the nice shop in the castle we bought fabulous goodies.We went in the real castle and had a picnic. Finally we went home
ABDUL KAZM is a Magical Persen.
Ronaldo is the worlds best footballer he has score goals 602 for Real Madrid and for is amazing country portrgul he as did more Assists then messi has done 578 goals for his club which was Barcelona and Argentina . Ronaldo assist for Real Madrid he has done 204 for Portugal messi has done 237 assists but Ronaldo is more bigger the Messi at winning headers ronaldo can also score all of his free kickers more then messi!!! Is that shocking because ronaldo has a partner Bale who has also scored a famous goal against Barcelona he used his pace to run against alba and scored a great goal.
Once apon a time,there was a beautiful girl that had a great and giant tiger she (the girl) was called Armanda and her giant tiger was called Loppy.One day Armanda with her tiger decided to go out to play.
On Wednesday the 27 of October , We had a teacher named Collette. We stayed at waddow hall.Our school is Essa primary.Anyways we first did nightline and she put us in a line we were blindfolded and we wore helmets.We went to an obstacle corse and our instructor led us as we wore the blind folds.Then we had a crate chalange we were in partners me and my best friend Aaliyah were partners and we started at four and went up and up by two.Then we went to the shop and brought a few things.
Dear mrs Atherton,
I am writing to you because we would like you to buy us a giraffe. The reason is they are very strong animals so they can carry every one to school if there’s a traffic jam or if there late the next reason is there really tall they can fix thing that are high up or you have to get something that is high up third reason giraffes are playful so if someone’s lonely and has none to play with it can play with it last reason is people can make a giraffe because giraffes are good at pausing.
Mrs Atherton you may think that they are going to poo everywhere but the smelly poo will firtidase the flower and school will look beautiful on one it will cost lots of money but on the other hand we will do a foundraiser .Although you may see that it will breaks things but we will teach it not to break things we really hope you buy us a giraffe for our school.
Hope you like it
Jack and Harry (Jack’s dog) in New York with lots of magnificent buildings like: skyline (lots of skyscrapers) superstores etc. They were very upset because they were missing something… the countryside. As a busker, Jack wanted to raise enough money to buy a trip to the COUNTRYSIDE.
Abdulkazam is always happy.
Mr . Shurlock clapped loudly
Mr Shurlock clapped slowly
Mr . Shurlock clapped quickly
Mr. Shurlock clapped gently
Micheal Jordan is a great basketball player and his team is called Chicago bulls. He is 1.98 m. He is looks like Shakil o Neil or a older version of usain bolt. He is currently 54 years old.
On Tuesday,me and twelve other people went on a minibus to go on a trip to Waddow Hall.We were staying at Waddow Hall Adventure House for two days and were coming home on the third day.On Tuesday we reached Waddow Hall but what we did was run straight for the bedroom.Then Mrs Weaver told us that Mr Kinch would give us the perfect commands for us so that we could do a nice neat bed.
Once we had made our bed it was time for our first activity!Our first activity was fencing so I was quite happy.The first thing we had to do was listen to our instructor.Her name was Ellie.She told us that we have to use a foil sword and equip a helmet.Once we had our helmets on,we then had to pair up and fence against each other.We had two go’s but in between them two go’s all we were doing were rolling down the hill.We were begging to at least have a drink and finally it was time to have a drink!After we had a little bit of a drink the teachers said that we were allowed to chill in our bedroom.
The girl who wants to go to the place that has 500,000 999 fine karat gold is so pumped but the tiger on the other hand has to walk all the way for about 68 miles which is too long to walk but if the tiger rebuilds their energy then they would reach in like 10 minutes but the girl was running it would take her maybe about 5/6 hours which is a lot of time.
This was written in Wednesday 20th September 2017. When we went to the circus, Tom said “I don’t believe in magic” “Don’t be silly, Tom” I said “Magic is real” I said again. I felt excited, “Its no-” “Shh, its starting!” I interrupted. The shiny lanterns turned all off, it was like the power went off, but they didn’t. A loud hush started! I sighed “Sssshhhhh!” I shouted, the audience went quiet. The curtains shut tightly, and it was dead silence… (story work in progress)
We went to a residential trip.I was happy it was my first ever residential trip. I was exited our first activity was fencing I won my opponent twice! We used epee sword and a fencing mask then we did archery the highest point you could get was 10 i got 9!! Our team won archery competition our team got 86 points and won. Then we did the egg drop challenge you wrap the egg and drop it we won again (:
Jack was a buster.He played instrument to collect money.He had a little dog called Harry.They lived in a big city with lots of skyscrapers.They were very unhappy and wanted to escape to the countryside.They always loved nature.Jack worked night and day and worked really hard.They were trying to get enough money to buy a motorbike.Jack realised that getting his best friend was Harry,back to the countryside was the best thing he could do for him.
Here are a few blogs for you to explore…
Room 2 Adventures Blog from New Zealand
Mr Webb’s Class Blog from New Zealand
Year 4 Class Blog at Windsor Primary School in Liverpool
Year 5 Class Blog at Windsor Primary School in Liverpool
In class this week we will be describing one of the main characters from our book ‘Leon and the place between’.
Last week, Abdul Kazam visited our class and we got to see what he is like, how he moves, how he sounds and what his personality is like.
When we write on Thursday we will need to include:
- Clothes and face
- Movement and speech
- Adjectives, Adverbs and Verbs
- What his talents are
- Relative clause sentences
- The two types of apostrophe (possession and contraction)
- And the forgetful people who keep misusing Capital letters will remember how to use them!